Tuesday, December 21, 2010

The first draft of the first part of this stupid story im writing

This was a story that I randomly started typing when I was so bored..Its just the first draft of the first part and there will be a lot of changes in the actual final version. So without further of due, here it is...
Synopsis:a story about a guy in a post apocalyptic city, just weeks after the disaster. he isnt looking for his family or nothing cuz he knows their dead. in stead he wants to go west to hollywood to get a copy of this movie that he wanted to see, but was scheduled to come out later.....he eventually gets to la to find a copy of the movie, only to realize the movie sucks


IT was a week after the bombs dropped. The situation overseas escalated beyond what anyone would ever think. One second the worlds at peace and the next min they are on the brink of nuclear war. All 7 continents were devistated by the constant bombing and consequences that followed. That Week was the worst in human history. Many people died, and some even killed themselves to get rid of the pain. Then you have Elias Mitchel.

Elias Mitchel can be considered by many to be a complete ass. Ever since Elementary School no one liked him because he was just rude and annoying to be around. As a 31 year old he confined himself to his house playing online poker and jerking off to intenet porn. The kids in his neighborhood had rumors that he might be a serial killer or a pedophile because he never came out of his house, the closest peoplle got to see him was the evil stare he gave to the kids who made too much noise. Elias was a lonley and angry person. His mother walked out on the family when he was three only to get remaried to their next door neighbor of all people. His dad on the other hand was a clueless pushover, who let people take advantage of him because he didnt want to start a conflict. His father on the other hand loved Elias and tried to provide him with the best of whatever he could get. When Christmas came around he usually took Elias to the movies for “Father – Son “ movie day, because that was the only time he had free between work and night school. Elias tried to hide his sadness on Christmas. It was hard for him to walk to the car without taking a quick glance in the next door window to see his mom happy with a new family. Elias ended up just sucking it up and trying to enjoy the movies with his father. Years later Elias still continues the Christmas tradition, even though his father tragically died of cancer years prior.

Christmas fell two weeks before the nuclear attacks. Elias woke up. Put some clothes on and went to the movies. There was nothing that really interested him, so he played a mental game of enie menie and just chose a movie at random. He ended up going with “Dr Freckles” a movie about a ginger Childrens doctor who had to use his doctor whit and skills as an amature clown to outsmart and save the children in the hospital from bumbling terrorist. Elias surprisingly enjoyed the movie. But prior to the actual movie the preievews came on. Out of all the previews, one movie in particular caught Elias's eye. The movie was Hunted. Hunted was based on a popular novel by Elias's favorite writer, Jeremy Quimby. In Hunted the main character is a mobster turned state witness who has to make it out of the country with a 300 million dollar bounty on his head. Elias had been hearing rumors about this movie for months and was so excited when he saw the trailer. Once he got home he got right on youtube to re-watch the trailer several more times. The film was scheduled to be released next month, an was already screened for critics and received fairly decent reviews.

Two weeks later, while the world was still recovering from the disastar that fell upon it, Elias woke up to his usual routine. He woke up, showered, ate a quick breakfast of “smego waffles” and started to turn on the TV. IT wasnt working. He then tried to fix the box., that also didnt work. He then grabbed his laptop and got on wahooo. He saw all the headlines about what was happening and he was worried. Not for his family, because they were either gone or all dead, but for the fact that now he would not be able to see Hunted. He picked up his phone and saw he had one text message. That text message was from his mom. The message simply said “Im sorry for everything, can you forgive me” and Elias looked at the time to see it was sent 3 hours ago. Elias then walked out of his house to get an apology to his face, but was saddned by what he saw. He peaked in the window like he used to at Christmas time to see his mother and her new family in the living room with gunshots in their head. He broke into the house and soon realized what had happened. They had done some family sucuide thing because they would rather die as a family then suffer alone. This was one of the few times Elias has actually cried. The last time was Christmas when he was six years old. He then checked the fridge, and stumbled across a weird door. This door usually looks heavily locked, but was wide open. Inside Elias found a whole bunch of guns. He then grabbed one of the little girls Miguel the Possum travel bags and filled up. He was so happy by this discovery, and even forgot what he saw in the living room.

Elias then looked at his laptop for something to keep him entertained. He then found the trailer for Hunted and watched that a few times. Then it hit him...He wont be able to see the movie. He cried like there was a death in the family and proceeded to swear more than a somali sailer. Then it hit him. If the movie was screened for critics that means that the movie is done and a copy exist. The only issue was the movie premered in LA and he lived all the way in Boston. He then devised a plan to go west, to obtain and watch a copy of Hunted that he hoped still existed. That day and night he packed his humble Honda civic with supplies, food, and guns and was ready to go. As he drove he saw the horrible world around him. Buildings were destroyed, dead bodies laid in the street, and seven/eleven was open. He then made a quck u- turn and went into 7/11. The store appeared to be empty so Elias grabbed whatever he could, and just as he was about to leave he heard.
“Where do you think your going?'' in an indian accent.

He turned around to see an indian gentleman with a nametag that said “Hi im Haji”. Elias proceeded to laugh because whats the chance of meeting an indian named Haji. They started to talk and Elias learned that Haji was a college student at the nearby community college, and works at 7/11 to help pay for tuition. He also told Elias that he locked himself in 7/11 because they had a lot of food, and it was easier to go there than to go all the way home. Elias asked about his family, and Haji talked about how they disowned him. Elias was confused and asked why. Haji then told a story about how once a month his family has a “sibling cook day”, where one of the kids make dinner for the family. It was his turn that day and he completley forgot. So he ran to McDonalds and bought a bunch of burgers and fries, unwrapped them, put them on a neat tray and presented them to his family. His family ate the meal and asked Haji what it was. He then told them about what happened and how it was MickeyD's. His family was LIVID. They wernt very happy that their son, “tricked them” into eating a cow (which is holy in the hindu faith) and then quckly disowned him. He's been on his own ever since. Elias felt bad, for him and told him about his mission and invited Haji to come along. Haji happily agreed. He then took his car outback and filled it with a bunch of supplies and both of them were on their way. Haji then suggested a faster way to get to LA. He reccommended that they go to the airport and see if they can “borrow a plane”. Elias loved the idea, so they turned around and went to the airport. They then found a mini plane that had a full tank of gas. They loaded their stuff and hopped in. They both sat down and looked at each other.

“Sooo ummmm are you gonna fly this?” asked Elias
“ummm I thought you were” Haji responded.
“ Do I look like I can fly a plane?!?” said Elias
“Ummmm I dont know, can you?” said Haji
“NO YOU IDIOT!!” yelled Elias
“well excuseeee mee” said Haji
“So what are we gonna do now?”
“Well I think I remember a little bit about flying. It was years ago when I went traveling with my friend Johnny, his dad and his bodyguard. I learned a little bit, but ill see what I can do.”

Just at that moment, Elias noticed a little army of cars speeding towards them, he noticed that they were all armed. He then pleaded with Haji to hurry.
“I am hurrying, Im not a terrorist you know, I cant just get to the cockpit and magically fly a plane, what are you racist?” said Haji
“Less talk..People are coming at us,and unless you can pull that peaceful Ghandi shit to them were all gonna die...So hurry up!!!
The cars were getting closer for the runway. Haji then did something and the plane began to move. It was getting ready for take off, when BOOM!!!!
Elias looked to see that a part of the plane was on fire because one of the armed men shot at it. The plane then stopped and the cars surrounded the plane. Twenty people got out and one stepped up and yelled
“Surrender now or well shoot you”
Elias then told Haji to play it cool and do something Ghandi would do. Haji then responded, “Ghandi wasnt bulletproof dumbass”. They got out of the plane and slowly walked towards the crowd awiting their fate.
“Whatchu boys doing here?” the mysterous man asked
“ Ummm nothing just going for an afternoon st-”
“WERE GOING TO FIND THIS MOVIE,” yelled Haji “ PLEASE DONT KILL US”
Elias had a furious look on his face. The man was confused.
“ I think we have the wrong person” the mysterous man said to his group of people. Were looking for that douche Lice Sanders. That cocksuckers owes me 12$ on that Celtics game bet and needs to pay up.”
He then told Elias and Haji about how they were tipped off that Lice would try and take a plane out of the state, because he didnt want to pay up. Haji turned around and said, Do you think he might be in that plane?” Just as he said this there was another plane that was on itsway to full takeoff.
“Getem boys” responded the mysterous man, and one of his boys pulled out a rocket launcher and shot the plane out of the air. “Well I think thats over”. The man and his group apologized to Elias and Haji and gave them sticky tape to tape up the hole they made on the plane Elias and Haji planned to take out. Then then helped them tape up the whole and shortly after they left.
“ Im not flying in that”, said Elias
“Ok then....so whatchu wanna do?”, said Haji
“Lets see if we find another Jet and if not we just drive”
Haji agreed . Elias then remembered that there was a Patriots- Jets game scheduled the day of the distastar, and he started searching around for the Jet's Jet. They eventually found it. They opened the door and they heard a noise. They got their guns drawn and folowed the noise. They made their way to the cockpit where they heard a footstep.
“Dont move” said the mysterous lady with her gun drawn
Haji and Elias jumped and saw who was making the noise. It was one of the flight attendants for the Jet's Jet. After an intense 45 second stare down, Haji broke the silence.
“So ummmmm whats cooking good looking”
“ You never actually talked to a girl before huh?” , said the lady
“Nope we have arranged marriages silly goose, but theres a first time for everything.”

She laughed it off, and introduced herself as Johanna. She was a survivor of the bombing by accident. She told the guys her story of forgetting her wallet and running back to the jet to get it and just as that happened the bombs started falling. She too, like Elias, was clueless on how to fly a plane and it didnt get any better when they noticed the gas was nearly empty. After realizing the whole trip to the airport was a waste of time, they decided to just drive. They both invited Johanna to come along, she agreed and they were off. The trip through the Mass Pike was easy because, there were no tolls and traffic. They continued to drive for a few hours, continously alternating drivers till they reached Ohio. They decided to take a break and make a stop in Clevland. Clevland usually sucks, and with the bombing it looks even worse. Its like an ugly person who got a busted lip. Anyway they got out an started walking around. They noticed a big fire a small distance away. They decided to aproach it to see if there were any survivors. Once they got there they were pretty disapointed. There was one guy around the fire trying to stay warm. The ironic thing about the fire was it was the big lebron James banner that got taken down. The man was a black guy who was in his mid thirties. He introduced himself as Muhhammed Alshiez Shabazz X. He gave Johanna and Elias dirty looks and happily greated Haji. When Haji asked, “whats wrong”, Muhammed replied, “Why you betraying your kind brotha, why you hanging around the so-called white man and getting ensnared by all his ways and stuff.” Elias then spoke up, “ But mister Muhammed, sir, Im not ensnaring anybody, I just want to get to CA to see this movie.” to which Muhammed replied , “Sure you are white devil. I bet your just taking this brotha from his home and using him to be your slave. I dont trust the so-called white man because they were the ones who started this war in the first place. No brotha would start this”

2 comments:

  1. That was Malcolm X in the end, right?

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  2. Nah, its supposed to be one of those Black israelite type guys..I couldnt think of a good name so I just put a bunch of names together lol

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